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Please help edit my research paper due tomorrow! +K

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ScubaSteveFather
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My paper is about oil use in transportation and if it is possible to replace it. I mostly focus on battery technology using graphene. I'm not going to post it on here because I have to turn it in via turnitin.com
but here is the dropbox link (its a word document) Don't worry I promise it is not a virus simply a dropbox link to my paper.

Thanks and +K to all who give good criticism (be harsh its helps me out) Its due tomorrow morning btw.

(click to download) word document
Apr 26 2012 1:24AM
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Radio
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fuck i was literaly about to steal your paper cause i need one by monday, then you said it needs to be on turnitin.com..
Apr 26 2012 1:31AM
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MothaHucker
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Already stealing it anyways just to fuck this kid over.
Apr 26 2012 1:32AM
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ScubaSteveFather
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now that would not be nice
Apr 26 2012 1:36AM
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MothaHucker
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just trollin. But I also have a paper due on monday that I am not looking forward to.
Apr 26 2012 1:40AM
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Radio
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posibly same paper??
Apr 26 2012 1:53AM
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MothaHucker
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shaw problems
Apr 26 2012 1:59AM
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ScubaSteveFather
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I can edit your paper for you if you'd like just PM me a link to it.
Apr 26 2012 2:03AM
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LivingColour
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1.) Comma after but in first paragraph
2.) I noticed you are using but a lot of the times in your first paragraph. Try mixing it up with words/phrases like however or on the contrary

not going any farther :( Don't have patience go get Mr. Mike-O
Apr 26 2012 2:03AM
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Basement.
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if you were my student i would fail you
Apr 26 2012 2:04AM
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ScubaSteveFather
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Alright. Why?
Apr 26 2012 2:15AM
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zzzzzzzzzzzz
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because you like SkullCandy
Apr 26 2012 2:42AM
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Toasty.
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ummm
Apr 26 2012 3:10AM
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OG_lock
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she has dark private parts
Apr 26 2012 3:10AM
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Bill.Nye
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I noticed a few typographical errors, for example in the first paragraph you write "Oils" when it should be written as a possessive ("Oil's). The more overarching problem in my opinion was a general lack of flow to the writing. It seemed as if all the sentences were too short and as soon as I started to get into it I was met with a period. It made it awkward to read.

Also, how can you not mention the Chevy Volt in a paper on electric vehicles?

What's the word requirement?
Apr 26 2012 3:10AM
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TheClap.
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Bc it is a piece if shit
Apr 26 2012 4:33AM
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ScubaSteveFather
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^^^
That and because the Chevy Volt is a plug-in hybrid not a fully electric vehicle

As for the word requirement its 1750-2500 words (I'm at 2000 exactly pretty much I think)
Apr 26 2012 1:25PM
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Bill.Nye
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So what? The whole point of plug in hybrids is to use electricity unless you hit the range limit, so it's almost always operating as a fully electric vehicle.
Apr 26 2012 2:33PM
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samskisalot
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Sounds like an interesting paper. I'm teaching an alternative energy unit currently. I think I'll steal the assignment.
Apr 26 2012 2:37PM
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rudedog41
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First paragraph the sentence that starts with...Oils...i'm sure it should be "Oil's"
Apr 26 2012 6:57PM
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ScubaSteveFather
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I handed the paper in already but I did fix it up quite a bit (using comments and another read-through of editing) Thanks all. +K
Apr 26 2012 7:53PM
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