it was... alright.
- better composition - get that railing out of the foreground, it's detracting from the shot and distracting from what you want the focus of the shot to be
- color correction - it looked really bland, get into some CC to give it maybe a little more contrast, and maybe som more saturation, it was a bit dull
- speed - nobody wants to watch a timelapse that goes that slow. take the original and speed it up so it only lasts about 10-20 seconds