Critique my Short Film!

Well I take back hating on you for wanting a 5d2.

In terms of technicalities I'm not cinematographer, but I thought you had a nice mix between pans, still shots, I might have put in a little bit more glidecam work, or none at all, I think there were only 1 or 2 shots in there so it almost felt out of place. I know this is nit-picky but the shot of him and his 'object' at the end was a tiny bit out of focus, or you switched it at an awkward time. Again not a big deal, but just something I noticed. I loved a lot of the shots where he was moving from the street to the roof, the one of him in the stairs was great, same with the lens flare, I absolutely loved that one.

But in terms of mood and feelings evoked I can definitely give you some good feedback, I watch a lot of short films. I really enjoyed that, it was a very simple concept with a very simple prop. I don't really understand the title, I interpreted it as Beyond Primary 'Colours', but I do have a concussion right now so bare with me, I'm pretty out of it. I'm going to try my best not to spoil anything, but I didn't see the ending coming at all, definitely finished strong.

Great work Chai,
I hope to see more of this in the future,

Zack.

I hit enter to early, my bad. Heres a bit more on theme/emotion, what I was getting too with the simplicity.

A lot of the stuff on homelessness that I have seen is more statistics, showing shots of shelters, and interviews, more journalistic. This was artistic, it simplified it for the viewer down to the very symbolic struggle of one man and his one possession. Very effective.

Thank you! The "Beyond Primary" title is relating to the colors of a rubik's cube, which obviously go beyond red, yellow, and blue.

The title IMO is only alright, just because its a bit hard to understand. To be honest, we were scrambling a bit for a title.

Thanks again for the critique!

hmmm.. like the idea but to me it seemed like it was filmed like a ski edit. every shot was either panning or tilting all from a tripod it seemed like (minus the couple that looked like glidecam shots.) for me, a lot of the shots seemed really tight and almost like i wanted to lean back a bit to "get out of the bubble" or look up so i wasnt just looking directly at his feet for so long on a couple of the walking shots.

I felt like some of the tilts and pans were awkward. It almost seemed like you were doing it just to get motion in your shot. I just think you could of spent a little more time thinking how the camera moves to help tell the story and not just doing a simple pan. I also noticed some of the shots dragged on a little bit. This definitely could be your shooting style as I have seen it before, but i personally in some cases would have cut to a close up here and there just to get a better sense of the character, if you get what i'm saying.

didnt like the filming

That's gonna help me so much for my next project!!!!111!!!11

And thanks to all the others, I agree that there were a few pans that I wouldn't Have done in hindsight

Looks like Portland. ahaha am i right or wrong? anyhow too much panning. i dont even think i remember like 1 still shot. The shot of him pissed off throwing the rubiks cube off definitely should be still i think. Sound design was good but a little off. the levels seemed a tad too loud.

And i think people feel like it was "tight" in a bubble because of the 2.35:1 ratio or whatever it is. I didn't think that was too bad. I would go with a more destaurated color grade, with hints of blue probably, to emphasize a somber mood.