great edit man! your best yet.
-i understand that the part in the beginning is for your friends, and that's chill. just as long as you know that it will probably cause a lot of people to stop watching if that type of thing goes on for too long
-great cuts once the music got going. you actually probably could have done a little more with the color in those shots, not that the color isn't good already
-Try not to be too repetitive with your shots. what i mean is that you don't need to have as many shots be dropping something in/out of focus.
-great job at :58 for using a clip most people wouldn't even think to use and burning it into a good lifestyle clip. the way you tied those two clips together with the film burn was real good
-sick shot at 1:00. great colors and use of audio
-the shot at 1:06 probably should have been cut. first of all, i can see that you slightly overshot your focus and went soft again for a second. that alone is usually enough to cut a shot (especially a filler shot) in my book. also, bear in mind that ideally, filler/establishing shots are used to tell a story. a close up of a sign, somebody walking with their board, an artistic shot of scenery, that kind of thing. the shot tells us we're somewhere with a fence, but not much more than that. i know it's fun to play around with focusing on stuff, but if it doesn't add to the 'story' then cut it.
-make sure you don't zoom with that lens. zooming while filming with a dslr is generally a bad idea, 1. because it's not smooth and 2. because on a non-fixed aperture lens, the exposure will change.
-what you probably should have done at 1:15 was linked the two good parts of the clip together with a film burn or something, cutting out that middle zooming/readjusting part. personally, i probably would have only used the first part of the clip since the second part was pretty far away and the exposure was changing.
-when you have a shot like the trampoline shot at 1:27, you need to do something to make it very different. either do something very unique with the colors, add camera movement (like a dolly), or just play with the focus. this is a shot where DOF porn (adding shallow depth of field for no real reason) would probably be acceptable to make it stand out from other tramp shots we've all seen.
-If you're making an edit, in general try to stay away from making 'segments' unless it's a long edit and each segment is long. to have one lifestyle shot and then one action shot for each person disrupts the flow of the edit. Also, I felt that the pacing and vibe of the lifestyle shot for Robbie didn't really gel with the flow of the rest of the edit.
hope that helps! as i said, awesome job, can't wait to see your next edit.