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mammothloc
Posts: 247 - Karma: 10
Join the carnival
Join the fun
See the freaks
Get ready to run

Lights and screaming
Excitement and mirth
The freaks are in town
Held back by a girth

Welcome to the show
Welcome to bliss
Welcome to hell
A place you won’t miss

Not a carnival
Just the big city
Back streets like hell
Full of pity

Forgotten people
An unknown place
Sections separated
Bye colors and race


-- i am the master of my fate, i am the captain of my soul
Apr 21 2005 10:59AM
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DynastarriderGP
Posts: 8258 - Karma: 214
that's cool.

Apr 21 2005 6:44PM
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skibum®
Posts: 520 - Karma: 13
nice, good rhymes

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strangers passing in hte street by chance two separate glances meet... and i am you and what i see is me
Apr 21 2005 7:14PM
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Annabelle
Posts: 647 - Karma: 10
yeah good stuff

ive waited all my life to cross this line into the only thing thats true -ryan cabrera
Apr 22 2005 3:58PM
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bigJ
Posts: 3148 - Karma: 10
you need to spell correctly, and "a girth"... tweak that line a little, and the repetition of hell is a little cliche and does not fit well with the rest of the imagery


Hunter S. Thompson
1939-2005

'Soberity is not an option.'

Drivin that Train
Apr 22 2005 7:23PM
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