not going to lie the editing seemed to be all over the place. There were random cuts dotted all over the place that didn't seem to make sense within the edit. e.g 0:07, 1:23-1:34 etc.
I'm also not a fan of the constant reversing of clips, it happened several times through the edit where you'd be panning and then reverse it, then reverse it again, i found it pretty distracting and difficult to watch.
Constructive criticism time, stabilisation would have been key, lots of shaky shots going on. Smoth shots can make a world of difference, and will generally be more pleasing to watch.
Next would be to have some idea of theme or at least direction you want to the video to go, do you want chronology within your shots, do you want all the similar shots together etc.