Holy fucking run on sentence. Don't ever intro to a video with such poor grammar, it just makes you sound and seem stupid.
Secondly, I watched this earlier and didn't really like it. It was just a bunch of random shots to me and it didn't even tell much of a story, there wasn't any emotion. Not to be harsh, but really it just needs improvement in all regards. Better filming - take time to compose your shots and get the one you want, better editing - even out the clips so they look similar and the video flows well, etc. Just make a lot of stuff and you'll get there.