that was pretty cool man, seriously. a bit dark, but that's a cool vibe, definitely different.
it sounded good overall, a little bit cluttered from about 50 seconds in, to 1:15 in, some of the kicks seemed like they were just slightly off, and that lower baseline that you added in felt like a little too much on top of the higher pitched beat.
but honestly, I would be pretty proud of that, and that ^^^ is just my opinion, i don't know much at all. keep working at it for sure, seems like you've got some skill and some good stuff in the works!
What do you use to make music?