Thanks guys, I really appreciate the critiques.
My biggest thing on this was the directing of the actors. Originally I wanted to just shoot it and have someone else direct. However after talking to a few different directors, their vision wasn't even close to what I was going for. Especially since I was on a tough time schedule, and renting the camera, it was tough to make sure the shot was good and have playback for acting. The next short I do this summer, I'm going to budget for way more time.
As for the cinematography goes, I wanted to use a glidecam/steadycam rather then having the camera on sticks all the time. However there was a mix up at the rental house... I could have could a Glidecam 4000... but no vest. Even with a bare bones rig, I could barely hold the camera for 30 seconds. The rig weighted over 20 pounds. I also though of using a shoulder mount, but I didn't like that way it looked. So then I settled for sticks. Oh well.
For the next short I do, I'm really going to focus on talent, because like mentioned alway, make the audience care about the actors. Thats my goal for the next one.
"this has a tilting 12" hd lcd with built in dolby 5:1 surround as well as a red velvet collapsable chair that folds into the battery grip and a small asian who lives behind the sensor and makes you popcorn. it's the same asian who cleans the sensors on all of canon's sensor cleaning bodies so it's not that revolutionary"