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Critique My Flatland Bike Teaser.

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DavidRoss
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http://http://vimeo.com/26850607



This is for my local bike shop so i would really like all the con.crit. i could get. Thanks!
Jul 25 2011 10:32AM
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DavidRoss
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Pleeeasse some feedback bump.
Jul 25 2011 11:36AM
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DOSE.
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broken link:

http://vimeo.com/26850607
Jul 25 2011 11:37AM
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DOSE.
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the shots at :14 and :20 are the same, just from different angles. combined into on shot that flows together.
it's just black from :32 to :37, which unnecessary, especially for that long.
the last shot with him on the ground seemed useless. i don't know what footage you have though.

hope this helps, good song choice and feel to the edit though.
Jul 25 2011 11:43AM
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DavidRoss
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Thanks! yah i did the double angles on porpose. definetely will go through all my other film. and yah youre right about the last shot.
Jul 25 2011 11:54AM
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JibbaTheHutt
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Dan Sirkin / Solon Bicycle Flatground Teaser. from David Ross on Vimeo.

Jul 25 2011 12:01PM
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DavidRoss
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Thanks man +k
Jul 25 2011 12:07PM
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Dwarftosser1
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I defiantly agree with the guy above me about the last shot and the blackness between :32 and :37. IMO try not to use film Burns so much, to me it is just kinda of repetitive and over used. All and all it wasn't a bad edit,nice job.

And a couple years ago I tried Flatland, shit is hard.
Jul 25 2011 1:09PM
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DavidRoss
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Thanks! Forsure. yah it looks insane.
Jul 25 2011 1:13PM
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Mkvackay
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other than what has been said above, start your shot after you start moving the tripod. although it looks smooth the start can be a bit jarring
Jul 25 2011 2:23PM
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DavidRoss
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Forsure. Thanks!
Jul 25 2011 6:32PM
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WillStart
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Enjoyed watching that man!


-Colors looked good
-I agree the black spot in the middle held for too long
-Flatland is such a sick looking sport, and provides a TON of opportunities to get not only wide shots, but also a ton of tight close-ups and such. don't be afraid to play around with getting a ton of unusual angles.
-it's ok to show the end of camera movement (such as tilting down to something then stopping on it, like what you did on the spine in the beginning), but avoid ever showing the beginning of camera movement. this creates a huge distance between the viewer and the video and makes them very aware that they're watching everything through the lens of a camera, which you want to avoid. starting camera movement during the shot can be done (usually in narrative work), but it's hard to learn when it's appropriate and should be avoided for the most part. even though showing the end of camera movement worked well for you in this edit, it should still be avoided a bit.
Jul 25 2011 6:51PM
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DavidRoss
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Thanks alot will! means alot. definetely will do.
Jul 25 2011 6:56PM
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DavidRoss
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Constructive Criticism Welcomed (Please) Bump
Jul 25 2011 10:56PM
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DavidRoss
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Final Self Bump.
Jul 26 2011 10:35AM
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the.cheat
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black spot, didn't need a bunch of different transitions imo
Jul 26 2011 4:46PM
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.cam.
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To add on to what Will said don't do two different camera moves in the same shot. I don't remember where but in one shot you were panning, stopped, and then tilted. the tilt and the stop where unnecessary. (Sorry Will if you said this already. Just trying to elaborate.
Jul 26 2011 5:41PM
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DavidRoss
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Definetely! and "Thecheat" absoluteky thanks for the input.
Jul 26 2011 9:44PM
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541
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i agree with this exactly.
Jul 27 2011 1:57AM
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DavidRoss
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Haha yupp. Thanks!
Jul 27 2011 10:25AM
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