Everything looks great man! Really stoked for you!
1.The jump cut at the beginning with the dog was a bit amateur, just either old that shot longer or switch it up.
2. I feel like you had to many shots of the drop in at GFFT
3.The water pain with geese was wayy to saturated
4. Seems like this was a quick throw together of just a couple months. As painful as it is wait maybe a year or so and compile all those shots(depending on how much you shoot)
Those are just a few things, I know I've been so stoked to start mine, I've got the perfect song and everything. Yet im waiting it out til the end of summer so it really showcasing my work. Which I think by doing this could really benefit you cause you have some sick stuff already!!
Keep it up!