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Commercial critique needed!

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BA.berger
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SKEI_REKLAME_NORSK from Bjørn Are Berger on Vimeo.

Password is: skeikampen
Any critique welcome!
k+ and all that stuff
Aug 3 2013 6:02PM
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BA.berger
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bump
Aug 10 2013 1:57PM
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Balbertt
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way to long for a commercial. At least in the US. It was good starting out, but the gopro shots and the biking kinda changed the vibe.
Aug 10 2013 2:00PM
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powderhound100
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To me the vibe seems kind of bland, try and figure out a way to show that people are really having fun.

For example have someone make a much harder putt and then show them getting excited after they make it. Maybe some close ups of people smiling, maybe have people playing tennis and someone ace someone or get a sweet volley and see them excited doing that yes fist motion or something like that.

I have no experience or knowledge of ads other then watching them, so take my advice with a grain of salt.
Aug 10 2013 2:41PM
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Steezy_P
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Overall, I thought that was actually pretty good. There were a few things here and there that really affected the video as a whole though. The one thing that I thought that was pretty major was the length of the clips. If you could trim these down a bit it would give it a better vibe I feel. As well as what he said ^ with just having people be excited in the video. Doing sick stuff, making long putts, so on and so forth.

But I as well don't know a lot about commercials, but I really do feel you have a great start to it!
Aug 10 2013 3:17PM
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sveinung
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Er ingen ekspert på dette men her er min mening: Synes den var litt for lang og du kunne droppet noen av de klippene som bare "fylte opp" og du burde endre teksten ved terrengsyklinga.
Men ellers var det en fin reklame.
Aug 11 2013 2:50PM
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