much much better. I'm talking exponentially better than your first track. with that said, it's still not dropworthy, but you will get there after you keep practicing your balls off, i promise. I like the sweeps a lot, maybe fine tune their levels a little bit, and at some points I felt like you could have added a crash, specifically 1:47ish (synthetic or regular cymbal whichever you think sounds better), and that you could rearrange your track a little bit.
I think it took a little too long to get to your 3rd movement where there is a relatively significant change. From the average listener's perspective, I would lose interest in the second part where it doesn't change or morph into something new. So maybe try rearranging it: try putting it before the first part and if it sounds good, leave it that way. if not, scrap that shit. Whatever you think sounds good should go.
Keep making more tracks. get fucking epicly efficient at using FL. write down shit you want to remember. practice makes perfect. good stuff dude.