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This. I took it first semester.
I don't remember writing a five page paper, but it's called CREATIVE writing, not a contraversial essay assignment, like all the other history classes. Write a story, fiction or real life, that's entertaining.
Correct, it is a solid sentence. I graduated undergrad as valedictorian. The past and present tense may both be found in one sentence. For example:
"Ahab hunts the White Whale because the near-mythical beast made off with his leg."
This is not a direct Melville quote, but would work as a line in Moby Dick. Of course, Melville would most likely make this one sentence into at least one chapter, giving great detail as to Ahab's leg. This would include the number of bones, the names of all of the bones (real or made up), the condition of the bones, the number of hairs on the leg, and so on and so forth.
I could add to the previous by saying "Ahab hunts the White Whale because the near-mythical beast made off with his leg, but will not be so lucky in the next go-round." This would merge past, present, and future, just as I did in my sentence that you attempted to correct. There is obviously a difference in casual writing as found here in responses, and the professional writing that would be found in a paper I wrote.
You are of course free to contact me. You will not be disappointed with the quality of the work. I write significantly better than your college's writing center. I am able to edit and revise with great clarity. I assure you, I both speak and write far better than your English professor who has been teaching for 35 years.