it was a good first edit. may i ask what camera and lens you were using? looks like a t2i.
some of the shots for sure could be cut down a little bit, the viewer doesn't really need to see him stop after the feature. the colors weren't to bad, but I would for sure have done some color correction. Now, this is a personal opinion, but I dont think the riders name's needed to be there. Especially on this short of an edit. Last but not least, get a few fillers in there. Be creative.
Because I'm from the suburbs, not Compton. And you look like an idiot when you are all thugged out in the parking lot waiting for Mom to pick you up in her Lexus crossover.