some good lines from what i listened to.i feel like you were faking your voice sometimes and often your words come out very staccato. smooth it out a bit.
but sick work. keep it up!
"I look at it like this; the park is like a canvas, you practice the art, but being out on a real mountain is like experiencing the painting. I want to get out there. Explore." -Parker White
"If you don't trash your body too bad when you're young and you stay in shape as you get older, you should be able to Brittney Bitch into your 70's." -Mr. Huck