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Anybody care to critique a song I just finished?

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95959
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So I just got all my recording gear back up and running and I decided to write a song today. Here's what I came up with.
Note: All guitars are mic'd Epiphone es-333 through my peavey valveking
Drums, pianos, and bass are all software.
I'll probably add vocals later.
Cheers!
Finished song(no vox) by dallascarnahan
Mar 1 2011 10:37PM
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95959
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PS stick around till the end.
Mar 1 2011 10:37PM
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Yung_Gnarley
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Super mellow. I like it.
One thing I would add is some light ride cymbal in the back to help fill up your sonic space a little better.
Mar 1 2011 10:39PM
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95959
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Thanks man!
good call on the ride though.
Mar 1 2011 11:03PM
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Malcolm
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that was sick! I loved the build up
Mar 1 2011 11:11PM
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bakedpow
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Digging it man. Keep it up
Mar 1 2011 11:29PM
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95959
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Much appreciated!
Mar 2 2011 12:43AM
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Franck_clever
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wow really beautiful! downloaded it right away
Mar 2 2011 1:00AM
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95959
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Sweet man!
Mar 2 2011 10:07AM
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95959
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Bump for e-pinions
Mar 3 2011 3:36PM
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Low.End
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I liked the song a lot, but i found the drums to be pretty distracting, they just seemed a bit too "fake" to me. obviously that could be changed later though
Mar 4 2011 12:44AM
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95959
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ha they are very fake, unfortunately i have no other options at the moment.
Anyway, here's the song with vocals, I think it helps the problem with the drums a little.
http://soundcloud.com/dallascarnahan/alright-just-fine
Mar 4 2011 12:48AM
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WillStart
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so sick, nice job man. Do you listen to post rock much? It really had that feel to me. somewhat explosions in the sky-ish
Mar 4 2011 2:35AM
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MotherFuckaJones
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Was that you on vocals?
Mar 4 2011 4:16AM
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95959
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Not a whole lot, but explosions in the sky is super sick. Thanks for the love
Mar 4 2011 10:28AM
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95959
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Yessir it was
Mar 4 2011 10:29AM
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BoardSideDown
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I actually really like this, good editing and overall structure. great job man
Mar 4 2011 2:48PM
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95959
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thanks brotha!
Mar 4 2011 9:40PM
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blatt
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Dont really listen to much rock anymore, but that was a tight song. I like how there's no vocals
Mar 5 2011 2:50AM
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bitchtitsbob
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I really dig it with vox. Your voice is pretty good, and it definitely fits with the song. Very nice.
Mar 5 2011 9:59AM
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Low.End
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haha yeah i completely understand. i don't know what program you used but if you are using Garageband (which the drums sound like to me) try using "AUMatrixReverb" (in the sidebar under "Details") on the drums for a more realistic sound.
The vocals sound great by the way!
Mar 5 2011 1:56PM
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95959
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Yeah I need to get a good drum plug-in for Cubase(I just use GB for MIDI). But I will definitely try that, thanks for the kind words!
Mar 6 2011 2:44AM
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