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Please critique this intro

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Bryan*
Posts: 1818 - Karma: 115
i know that the black around the shot is kinda annoying and im going to change it but other that please let me know what you think.

Jan 31 2011 9:20PM
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Bryan*
Posts: 1818 - Karma: 115
anything?
Feb 1 2011 11:11AM
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MatRich
Posts: 4789 - Karma: 1,812
too much focus on the signs, it gets redundant. there should only be one shot of a sign in there. the rest should be nice looking shots of the mountain/ facilities. Also the vignette is too strong. i would take it off
Feb 1 2011 11:27AM
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bootleg_BEN
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Take out the vignetting and less of the first sign. And the last shot of the smart style didnt fit to me. Other than that i think it looks great. Good job
Feb 1 2011 11:42AM
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quixotic
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that entire intro could have been done in 12 seconds. Way too repetitive and boring. I don't have much else to say but tell a story with your shots. When you read a book do they repeat the same sentence 5 times? No. So don't repeat that sign a million times. Yes, a few different angles is fine, but each individual shot was too long. More creativity... kind of bland and cliche shots. Get ARTSY!
Feb 1 2011 1:44PM
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pr4l
Posts: 348 - Karma: 56
do this and it will be 100 times better.
Feb 1 2011 5:08PM
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Ben.
Posts: 21463 - Karma: 683
this. especially the pan one way across the sign. and then the same pan back the other way.


and yeah, lose the vig.
Feb 1 2011 5:54PM
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