Most of my beef wasn't with the editing at all. It was with the shooting. The follow cam's and moving shot's were by far the most ingaging and interesting. While the shot's that were taken standing seemed boring and less impressive. I'd say the music choice was a bit cliche but alright.
As far as the "editing" goes I think you did a good job. It's hard to peace everything together. I'd say next time have only ONE filmer, YOU. Choose less cliche music, and maybe color correct the washed out shots. Other than that you did great!