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Song i wrote for my girlfriend (song link)

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C00N3Y
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So tell what you think

I sing the majoirty and than my friend patrick takes it at one point

he also produced the beat

Apr 12 2009 12:54PM
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Dylan_
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i kinda like it . good looks
Apr 12 2009 1:04PM
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C00N3Y
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shanks
Apr 12 2009 1:05PM
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Dylan_
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no problem. i guess it takes some balls to post a song you wrote for your girlfriend on NS.
Apr 12 2009 1:10PM
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C00N3Y
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pros:
good feedback
maybe some people like it

cons:
i can get e-chirped
Apr 12 2009 1:13PM
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SirFryanator
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dude this is hella good. major props to you for your singing and to your friend for the beat.
Apr 12 2009 1:43PM
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no_steeze
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Apr 12 2009 1:50PM
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Mrvic.
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man dude, not the kind of music i listen to... but that was hella good, im sure she will apreciate it a lot. i can tell you put alot of time into it. props hope it goes well! let us know how it went
Apr 12 2009 1:51PM
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BootySpunk.
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You gonna get laid!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! But seriously that was dope.
Apr 12 2009 1:52PM
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C00N3Y
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thanks d00ds
Apr 15 2009 7:20PM
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Tbrody
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serious potential. some of the lyrics could be changed imo. reminds me of Rocket to the Moon, NeverShoutNever, and The Secret Handshake. Do you know these bands? What did you use to produce to song?
Apr 15 2009 7:25PM
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k.perkins
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he is so right..

dude this is really amazing. usually i think that cheesy song singing shit is hella lame, but id fall for this in a heartbeat. good work.
Apr 15 2009 7:27PM
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BigJew
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hahah. It took me a moment to get it and then I laughed my ass off.
Apr 15 2009 7:31PM
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Panchuk
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so dope man..
i actually enjoyed that so much more know it came from an ns'er
Apr 15 2009 7:32PM
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8ONE657
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I LOVVEEEEEE IT! no jokeeee. seriously i could listen to this over and over again.
emo sounding voice with a dope assss beattt
what a good bf you are :]
Apr 15 2009 7:34PM
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PATRON
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wow, that is totally gonna get you some
Apr 15 2009 7:35PM
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artfullydodged
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wow dude this is great
Apr 15 2009 7:39PM
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C00N3Y
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what lyrics would u want changed?

umm ya ive heard those..funny story one of my girl 'friends' happened to mention nevershoutnever and secret handshake when i sent her this song

umm i used pro tools 8, reason plug in, wave tune (like auto tune) rode nt 1 mic, keyrig 49 and a lot of time and effort

btw im 15
Apr 15 2009 7:39PM
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jayo.
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have fun with that poonani
Apr 15 2009 7:41PM
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iluvBread
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that was dope as fuck mannnnnnn.....the beat was sooooooooo sick!.....if she doesnt like this then i would leave her if i were you..ha.....but im sure she'll love it!
Apr 15 2009 7:41PM
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Tbrody
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"with my arms around your back, yeah / butterflys and working overtime"
- doesn't rhyme that well and I don't like the butterflys line, but the overtime repetition is great
chorus is dope but change this maybe:
and you know oh, oh, (that) i could (stay) / be the one to make you wanna say I...

just stuff like that

thats way dope that your 15 and wayyy dope you have pro tools and a 49key, i could only dream...


Apr 15 2009 7:48PM
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Panchuk
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The guy coming in at 2:05-ish is a great touch too.

Apr 15 2009 7:51PM
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SteezyasPie
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holy shit! that was really good man, props for only be 15 too, do you have the lyrics you could post up?
Apr 15 2009 7:55PM
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Sufferboy
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taylor conney is getting ponney. hahhahaha. Im usually into hard core/ punk rock but i dig that song
Apr 15 2009 7:55PM
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Download-My-Apps
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you're gunna get some!
Apr 15 2009 7:56PM
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hotdog.garbage
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it sounds like a mix of so many bands and genres i hate. but at the same you did great work with it. good things, friend.
Apr 15 2009 8:00PM
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b-kul
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not my style so much, but really good, very catchy.
Apr 15 2009 8:04PM
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duckets.
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cooney's gettin his dick wet. pretty ill voice for a 15 year old. Blow that track up at your school and the ladies will be flocking
Apr 15 2009 8:05PM
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Yung_Gnarley
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fuck dude did you personally pay for all of that software? cuz i cant even afford protools, let alone all that other shit
Apr 15 2009 8:07PM
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lineC88
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shit man!!  that was really good!!
def gettin laid with that one
Apr 15 2009 8:12PM
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Mooose...
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Not bad man. I was pretty impressed.
Apr 15 2009 8:18PM
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C00N3Y
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ya i paid for everything

it was $1300
total
the mbox 2 pro is the most expensive

lyrics

(1 Verse)

There’s the moon with intentions from another night
But we wont sleep, baby no sleep tonight
With my arms around your back ya
Butterflies are working over time
Cause you know all of
What I would do
Whatever it takes
To have you hold you
And you know
All I could...
To be the one to makes you wanna say
I think that I am falling for you

(Pre-Chorus)
All I know is you get me through the day
Everyday
And you help me sleep at night
Not only that
You seem to found a way
To make everyday the best day of my life

(Chorus)
Cause you know all of that I would do
Whatever it takes to have you hold you
And you know all of what I would...
To be the one to make you wanna say
I think that I am falling for you

(2 Verse)
I wish I could tell you everything I wanted to say
I’m think maybe I could be the one to make you stay
I am in the dark
I want you to be my light
To....

To make everyday the best day of my life

(3 Verse/Rap)
She’s the reason
She’s the reason
I hate it when she’s leaving
I swear to god I would stay awake to hear you breathing
Try to convey the blessing
Of being upon your presence
Tell you in every sentence

(8th)
This day that I hate so much
Is a little bit better now that you have given me a reason to stay
x 4


(Outro)
Cause you know all of what I would do
Whatever it takes
To have you hold you
And you know all I would
Be the one to make you want to say
I think I’m falling for you





Apr 15 2009 8:18PM
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B.Snow
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did you use vocal correction at all?
Apr 15 2009 8:27PM
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C00N3Y
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yessssssss
Apr 15 2009 8:44PM
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Sufferboy
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write me a song now. but i want it to be about me as a kick ass ninja
Apr 15 2009 8:47PM
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Loges
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seriously, this isn't my type of music.. but it sounds mad good. do you have anything else recorded?
Apr 15 2009 8:55PM
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Pippin
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Well it sounds really high quality done. Sounds exactly like something like falloutboy singer... rapper at 2 min mark threw me off, but damn i wasn't expecting that much
Apr 15 2009 9:00PM
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C00N3Y
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http://www.sendspace.com/file/qdpshb

theres a link to a beat

feel free to write lyrics and post

you'll get cred and mention on the track

new beat soon
Apr 15 2009 9:18PM
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Aaaron.
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definitely girl music.
sounds good.

join a punk band though.
Apr 15 2009 9:20PM
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pho[tog]rapher
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yo no matter how many people would say it's corny or something, it's definitely dope and anyone would be stoked to have a song written about them. lucky girl.
Apr 15 2009 9:25PM
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x-port
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that was real good dude
Apr 15 2009 9:36PM
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Kori
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super legit. i am really digging it. nice work
Apr 15 2009 9:47PM
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TheBeardedOne
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Dude that was awesome and you have some serious potential there.. nice work son and your girlfriend better love you haha
Apr 15 2009 9:57PM
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8ONE657
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i cannot stop listening to this song!
Apr 15 2009 10:00PM
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C00N3Y
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oh thanks

secks?

i keed
Apr 15 2009 10:04PM
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8ONE657
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hahaha.

and i just read that you are only 15?! wow very talented :]
Apr 15 2009 10:09PM
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steezeaholic.
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ahh it's sick!! .. she's gunna love it for sure

Apr 15 2009 10:11PM
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[~_~]
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I got a little something for your girlfriend too...
Apr 15 2009 10:11PM
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amo
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Man you got something good goin for you.
Lots of talent, thats for sure. The song was super well put together, i liked it quite a bit.

but dude... that beat that you just posted, i listened to it and i just wanted it to go on and on.
Keep at it man, if you continue you've got a career ahead of you.
Apr 15 2009 10:17PM
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8ONE657
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sorry to keep posting but i just thought of something...
you could be the next passion pit :)

hahah they started out the same way!
Apr 15 2009 10:19PM
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C00N3Y
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no one has lyrics for the new beat?

pm if u do
Apr 15 2009 10:21PM
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