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My poem

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skipimp_
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> try to escape the premade life
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> try to create your pain and strife
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> not one, maybe two
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> watch others walk on you
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> feel weak
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> must speak
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> not wrong or right
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> 'be polite'
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> it's how you fight
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> yeah right
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> chase the light
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> feel dalight
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> agnosticism on the wall
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> take the fall
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> learn to crawl
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> time to pass
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> go to class
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> smoke some grass......?
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> longing past
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> forever dreams
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> ripping slowly at the seams
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> longing love
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> shot dove
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> be happy!
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> feel crappy
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> in a tree
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> sappy?
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> just me
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> with me
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> do i care?
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> lose some hair?
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> try some Nair!
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> fuck tv
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> which feeds
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> off my mediocraity
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> fake needs
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> take weed
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> decreased productivity
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> towards the man
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> comfort in action
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> he has no hands
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> basic satisfaction
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> get a reaction
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> to the end
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> possible attraction
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> my only friend



the only problem with man is that he doesn't know how he ought to live

The more you want something, the less likely it will happen.

stealin and dealin screamin semen like a demon


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bring Back The 60's!!
Dec 7 2003 4:32PM
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SimonFiller
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just when we thought you couldn't be more of a fruitloop....
Dec 7 2003 4:38PM
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Prins
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here's a poem for an ex of mine. called Red Sand


The tide has gone out to sea
taken everyone but me.
So I sit here alone and cold,
staring at the moon
longing for you to hold.
Night breaks into day,
everything still at bay.
I shutter with that warmth
as fingers dig into open wounds
left by you.
Pretending to hang on
before you had left and gone.
Salt water now burns my flesh
in the wounds you left.
Leaving me sitting on blood stained sand
waiting for someone who’ll understand
the pain of the sea
you caused me.
Dec 7 2003 4:51PM
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skipimp_
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it's good..but remember

you are ultimately responsible how you feel

she didn't break your heart..you did.


the only problem with man is that he doesn't know how he ought to live

The more you want something, the less likely it will happen.

stealin and dealin screamin semen like a demon


Opinions are like assholes, everybody's got one.

bring Back The 60's!!
Dec 7 2003 5:47PM
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ThisAngelicRage
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Nice guys





-Lauren


I'm not much of a man by the light of day
But by night I'm one hell of a lover
I'm just a sweet transvestite
From Transexual Transylvania...
Dec 7 2003 5:52PM
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joei
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i like both of them
keep upthe good work



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.joei.

Girls of NS represent
busted knees 4 LIFE
Dec 7 2003 6:31PM
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SimonFiller
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do girls like it when guys write poems? hmm...
Dec 7 2003 6:41PM
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ECfreeski3
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roses are red
violets are blue
your eyes are so beautiful
poems are queer


'you should probably get bindings or it will be hard to stay on your skis...don't get gloves tho, gloves are out. just use a cigarette to keep your hands warm' -221
Dec 7 2003 8:15PM
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joei
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REAL men write poems



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.joei.

Girls of NS represent
busted knees 4 LIFE
Dec 7 2003 8:19PM
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ECfreeski3
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oooohh.


'you should probably get bindings or it will be hard to stay on your skis...don't get gloves tho, gloves are out. just use a cigarette to keep your hands warm' -221
Dec 7 2003 8:24PM
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Prins
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i know she didn't break my heart, but I took some artistic verse and wrote how I felt at the time, like six months ago now.
Dec 7 2003 9:03PM
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skipimp_
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you clicked on the thread man..it said my poem...


the only problem with man is that he doesn't know how he ought to live

The more you want something, the less likely it will happen.

stealin and dealin screamin semen like a demon


Opinions are like assholes, everybody's got one.

bring Back The 60's!!
Dec 7 2003 9:13PM
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SimonFiller
Posts: 1681 - Karma: 10
well here goes nothing then:



A guy sticks his location,
In a girl's destinstion,
To increase the population,
For the next generation.
Do you get my explanation?
Or do you need a demonstration?

Dec 8 2003 12:16AM
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UpDawg
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Nice one Shawn...it's easy to read becuase it makes total sense. At least to those of us that understand the bigger picture...
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Dec 8 2003 12:30AM
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PhaedeD
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my poem.

fuck you.











Go Big and Die!
Dec 8 2003 1:00AM
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skipimp_
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good one


yeah, lots of people can't follow it though....they read it to fast....they don't see how it flows...

thats ok


the only problem with man is that he doesn't know how he ought to live

The more you want something, the less likely it will happen.

stealin and dealin screamin semen like a demon


Opinions are like assholes, everybody's got one.

bring Back The 60's!!
Dec 8 2003 4:09PM
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SimonFiller
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skipimp...do you think your Robert Fucking Frost or something?
Dec 8 2003 10:05PM
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WIfreeskier
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pretty good shit

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Dec 8 2003 10:06PM
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Crystal-needs-a-park
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i clicked on the thread so i could call you a fag whos not a very good writer again... and what is dalight?
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Dec 8 2003 10:52PM
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UpDawg
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SimonFiller, shut the fuck up. He's got an opinion, respect it for what it is. It's more than you've got.
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Dec 9 2003 12:31AM
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KootenayGuy
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nice, nice. I have some of my own which i will post tomorrow or somethin. right now i need some sleeeep...
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Dec 9 2003 2:11AM
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J.D.
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Prins, that was great. I especially liked the penultimate line, the pain and the sea, the way it implies a sea of pain, and 'left by you' has great dramatic effect and can be taken on its own as well, nicely done. I'm wondering though, what does the moon line mean? it seems to have some importance for you to have abandoned the rhyme scheme there as you did with the 'left by you' line, which is probably the central line. What's the importance? Symbolic value of something?
Dec 9 2003 2:33AM
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skipimp_
Posts: 5700 - Karma: 113
dalight is intentional

it's a mix between delight and da light..as in 'the light'

go ahead call me a fag, it really pisses me off and hurts me deeply..i might even be scarred for life


the only problem with man is that he doesn't know how he ought to live

The more you want something, the less likely it will happen.

stealin and dealin screamin semen like a demon


Opinions are like assholes, everybody's got one.

bring Back The 60's!!
Dec 9 2003 1:55PM
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SimonFiller
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UpDawg...are you his cornholing side kick?
Dec 9 2003 2:12PM
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skeechic1357
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Oh oh I have a poem!

Roses are reddish
violets are blueish
if it weren't for Christmas
we'd all be jewish



Let's make like a tree and...bounce!
Dec 9 2003 3:10PM
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skipimp_
Posts: 5700 - Karma: 113
INSIGHTFUL...

keep em comin
the only problem with man is that he doesn't know how he ought to live

The more you want something, the less likely it will happen.

stealin and dealin screamin semen like a demon


Opinions are like assholes, everybody's got one.

bring Back The 60's!!
Dec 9 2003 7:42PM
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PhattTim
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how the hell would we all be jewish but not for christmas?? retard.

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Dec 9 2003 7:51PM
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UpDawg
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Filler- is it hard for you to respect other people's opinions? Or is it just becuase no one can respect yours that you don't respect others?
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Dec 9 2003 8:27PM
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Crystal-needs-a-park
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heres a tup on poetry, something ive heard from every english teacher since middle school: DONT RHYME... it wont work unless you really are robert frost or another accomplished poet.
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Silly Rabbits. Pink is for cheese! –stevexs2
you bettter still have my jagermeister shirt, or I'll fucking drive a train through your anus. – jibtech
numbers are for jewish investment bankers - sleezemcfly
Somedays I like it crunchy, other days I take it up the ass! - Lanemeyers
Looting, it's the new way to buy stuff! - Jib_This
Dec 9 2003 8:55PM
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skipimp_
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you mean you've never heard of me?


the only problem with man is that he doesn't know how he ought to live

The more you want something, the less likely it will happen.

stealin and dealin screamin semen like a demon


Opinions are like assholes, everybody's got one.

bring Back The 60's!!
Dec 10 2003 1:15PM
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SimonFiller
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UP_Dung...what are you talking about? Your one dropping short of a pile of shit. Nobody said anything about opinions. Your cornholing accomplice, Ski_turd, wrote a poem and it sucked. It has nothing to do with me not honoring his opinion. I'm not honoring his poem...thats all. I felt the quality was shatty. You dont seem very smart.
Dec 10 2003 1:40PM
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UpDawg
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The content of his poem was heavily influenced by the way he sees the world- thus being influenced by his opinion. If you didn't like the poem, you obviously didn't like it for it's content, thus you didn't like it because of his opinion. Live and let live. If you didn't like it, I'm sure he doesn't care what you think. And for that matter, I don't see why I should care about you either...whatever. Take it for what it's worth.
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Dec 10 2003 2:29PM
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SimonFiller
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even if i didn't like his opinion the poem could still have been well written. are you that absent minded?
Dec 10 2003 3:54PM
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UpDawg
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I happen to think it was well written, as do most people that responded to it.
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Dec 10 2003 4:06PM
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SimonFiller
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thats your opinion and i honor that, but i think it sucks. just my 2 cents. take it as you please.
Dec 10 2003 4:07PM
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UpDawg
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Alrighty then...we'll agree to disagree.
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Dec 10 2003 6:20PM
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Prins
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J.D_May, the line about the moon is meant to symbolize the light that seems so distant. By staring at it there is this feeling of longing and desire to have attained it, it being this desire to find the love of my life, and thinking I had to then have it ripped out, sitting confused staring at it, trying to understand it. I had toyed with the idea of making it 'new moon', but felt it didn't really capture what I was feeling at the time. Thanks for actually checking it out and reading it over, glad ya liked it.
Dec 11 2003 11:32AM
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skipimp_
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....waste of my time that kid.....

I dont get too crazy with the words i choose to use....when i find the right word i use it, i can't make all the words some unintelligable train of thought from my brain that has too many subtlties...sp?...that only I can figure out what it means.....theres a line in there somewhere.....but i guess maybe there isnt....

the only problem with man is that he doesn't know how he ought to live

The more you want something, the less likely it will happen.

stealin and dealin screamin semen like a demon


Opinions are like assholes, everybody's got one.

bring Back The 60's!!
Dec 11 2003 6:51PM
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